The mirror shards,
sharp as the strands of grey hair,
unvarnished
like the redwood trees.
You would not recognize
the resilient starfish
left on the shore
to die.
You were a stray dog
that followed me home.
I let you into
my consciousness.
You wagged your tail,
you licked my face
with adoration
before you barked.
When you bit me,
I put you down.
I was sober,
you were not.
I was not a munequita
to chew and spit out.
Blindfolded I was lured
by the darkness,
misery I mired in.
You set fire and scorched
our landscape.
I rose from the ashes,
while
you
became a
ghost
of the past.
unvarnished like the redwood trees...... like those tall trees.
ReplyDeleteMe too
DeletePushing past those one should leave behind
ReplyDeleteYes!
Delete'I was sober, you were not' - really stands out for me..sometimes we have to be sober in all senses in order not to be bitten twice.
ReplyDeleteSometimes it's a hard lesson to learn.
DeleteI think this is a perfect poem!
ReplyDeleteHi Ayala! Good to read you again. I hope this poem isn't about that lovely doggie in the pix! A deep, complex poem to me....some really great lines in this poem.
ReplyDeleteJane
No, it's not!
DeleteThis is such a powerful metaphor, Ayala--and I know it couldn't be about Daisy. One of the things I love most about your imagery is the texture and how well that bark fits the poem.
ReplyDeleteYes, a metaphor.
DeleteLooking at the smiling pup on your website, I know it is not she and who makes me smile everytime. Sometimes we do the wrong thing because we are not paying attention. Good thing you were awakened and able to move on.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely a metaphor.
DeleteNice to be back here and read your characteristic work - like revisiting an old friend - thank you... With Best Wishes
ReplyDeleteThank you! Nice to see you here.
DeleteOh this is wonderful... somehow it feels so much better afterwards, but that betrayal, that bite must have stung... but somehow we can heal and get through
ReplyDeleteI am healed...but it took a long time.
DeleteThis is unvarnished and I like the rawness of it. I was that resilient starfish too, Ayala. I'm glad you put that "dog" down and persevered.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you made it out too.
DeleteSuch twists and turns in this piece. I could feel the strong emotions at the end.
ReplyDelete"I rose from the ashes,
ReplyDeletewhile you became a ghost of the past."
~Ah... beautifully haunting.
Thank you,Maria.
DeleteWOW!! You left me breathless Ayala!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sanaa.
DeleteVery nice one of the best I have read all week...nice work and thank you for sharing...bkm
ReplyDeleteThank you kindly!
DeleteThis is a wow for me! Just gorgeous writing!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Audrey.
DeleteThis is a wow for me! Just gorgeous writing!
ReplyDeletePowerful ... Glad I read this. Beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeletePowerful images in this - stirring and triumphant in the face of betrayal. Awesome writing!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Wendy.
DeleteI like the voice and quiet strength here. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Susan.
DeleteYour words speak volumes, it is hard when you let someone into your consciousness and then that bite it hurts, but the human will is stronger and survives.
ReplyDeleteAll lessons....
DeleteThis breaks my heart, Ayala! This is one powerful poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Mary.
DeleteI was glad to see in the comments that this was a metaphor. It is a very powerful poem and I especially admire your closing lines. I rose from the ashes of a few of those ghosts as well. Smiles.
ReplyDeleteGlad you did! Thanks, Sherry.
DeleteSuch sadness when wild things we invite in are dangerous. It takes strength to say no, and it always takes away part of us.
ReplyDeleteTrue.
DeleteWhen you bit me,I put you down.
ReplyDeleteI was sober,you were not
As often the case there might be lots of elements trying to get one's attention but could not! Yes, one must be in full control!
Hank
Thank you, Hank.
Deletesometimes moving on is so difficult as the ghost stays...may be as an alert not to repeat the mistake...that bite, a strong metaphor here....
ReplyDeleteThe wisdom is in the lesson :)
DeleteThis one pulls at the heart.. no doubt.. beautifully penned.
ReplyDeleteBig Hugs.
Thank you!
DeleteI did read it as a metaphor – and glad you dropped that relationship. Sometimes it's the only good choice.
ReplyDeleteSometimes...it's the only way to save oneself.
DeleteThinking a man who was a dog here ...
ReplyDeleteYes.
DeleteStrong imagery and vivid descriptions heighten the depth and emotion of this prose - so good to see your words again, Ayala. xo
ReplyDeleteThank you, Rudri. xo
DeleteWhat a sad past...but happy to read that it is just a ghost in the past now.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Grace.
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