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Tuesday, December 20, 2011

Rain

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Rain rolled on my lips,
stealing a kiss like an old lover.
Jealous you watched with regret.
 Into the universe,
I sent 
a thousand paper ships,
lined up like soldiers 
with your name written 
with my blood.
The echos of my voice calling you,
carried by the wind,
followed them on the journey.
This Christmas,
and every day
I give you my heart,
don't put it on a shelf to admire.
Don't put it in a box  to keep,
don't hang it on a wall,
to watch it bleed,
to watch it fall.
I give you my heart,
the rain watches,
 jealous with regret. 



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28 comments:

  1. Brian MillerDecember 20, 2011 at 7:58 AM

    smiles...very cool...love the jealousy of the rain on the lip but in the end we find that it is the rain that is truly jealous of the love you give....nice...

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  2. ScarletDecember 20, 2011 at 8:49 AM

    Lovely message and these lines resonate with me:

    I give you my heart,
    don't put it on a shelf to admire.
    Don't put it in a box to keep,
    don't hang it on a wall,
    to watch it bleed

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  3. Pat HattDecember 20, 2011 at 10:31 AM

    The rain is jealous, who knew? Great verse for dVerse from you.

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  4. AnonymousDecember 20, 2011 at 3:24 PM

    Rain rolled on my lips,
    stealing a kiss like an old lover.

    How could I not read on with those starting lines? And I was not disappointed - I love everything about this poem...

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  5. LauraDecember 20, 2011 at 3:49 PM

    Beautiful Ayala...so much pain!

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  6. hedgewitchDecember 20, 2011 at 4:44 PM

    Very clever and effective turn around in this one ayala--nicely done. I love the images of the paper boats, and the heart especially.

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  7. LouiseDecember 20, 2011 at 4:45 PM

    A very heartfelt poem....you bleed across the page. Beautifully done..

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  8. MaryDecember 20, 2011 at 4:53 PM

    strong writing here. intensity of feeling. rich language. I feel with you, Ayala!

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  9. ClaudiaDecember 20, 2011 at 5:12 PM

    oh i love, love, love the thousand paper ships ayala...what a great image..and the jealous rain of course..

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  10. AnonymousDecember 20, 2011 at 6:25 PM

    Ayala, I always enjoy visiting. You write so beautifully. Love that opening line"...steals a kiss like an old lover..." ahhh sweet! :)

    http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2011/12/20/polaroids-of-delilah/

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  11. Joanne Young ElliottDecember 20, 2011 at 11:19 PM

    We give our hearts in the hopes that those we give it to will keep it close to their being, will value such a gift by giving their own. Very interesting images.

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  12. TALONDecember 20, 2011 at 11:27 PM

    Such fabulous imagery, ayala. Deep, moving, and beautiful.

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  13. BaishaliDecember 21, 2011 at 1:09 AM

    fantastic images and an intelligent turn ... loved it.

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  14. wayside word gardenDecember 21, 2011 at 1:43 AM

    Love the imagery of the paper ships; beautiful, strong piece!

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  15. AnonymousDecember 21, 2011 at 2:41 AM

    Nice twist at the end. Lovely, deep felt piece!

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  16. Steve KingDecember 21, 2011 at 6:52 AM

    Ayala,
    You make a very seamless twist here, from first to last.

    "I sent
    a thousand paper ships,
    lined up like soldiers
    with your name written
    with my blood."

    My favorite figure. It's a good image for what we do, here and elsewhere. I enjoyed seeing this. I hope the spirit of the season is kind to you and yours.

    Steve K.

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  17. Laurie KolpDecember 21, 2011 at 8:27 AM

    Beautiful and profound. Blessings to you and yours this holiday season.

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  18. TashtooDecember 21, 2011 at 9:25 AM

    Deep and darker holiday write, dear Poetess! Love the word play and the fantastic images that flew from your pen...Wishing you and yours the most joyous of holiday seasons!

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  19. AnonymousDecember 21, 2011 at 3:48 PM

    LIke Joanne said, very interesting images. Loved the switch, rain to heart to beloved in jealous exchange. I really felt it, the rain on the lip especially.

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  20. Luke PraterDecember 21, 2011 at 4:32 PM

    flurry of emotions in this one Ayala. Interesting uses of heart.

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  21. VictoriaDecember 21, 2011 at 7:26 PM

    There are some many good images here: ascribing feelings to the rain, objectifying the heart and putting it on a shelf... Nicely written, Ayala.

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  22. Other MaryDecember 22, 2011 at 8:03 AM

    The image of the thousand paper ships is so cool, as is the jealousy swap.

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  23. SheilaDecember 22, 2011 at 11:14 AM

    wow, the paper ship image is impressive.

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  24. BelindaDecember 22, 2011 at 2:09 PM

    This was stunning, Ayala! I loved the depth of feeling and the vivid images.

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  25. Mark ButkusDecember 23, 2011 at 10:49 AM

    Merry Christmas and I hope your heart is cared for this holiday season.
    Cheers,
    Mark Butkus

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  26. PatriciaDecember 24, 2011 at 9:14 AM

    What a beautiful poem, Ayala... I love the thousand paper ships. It was there, I saw your faith come through in this piece. I felt as though you captured the thoughts of God himself. Thank you always for your kind words to me. I hope you can feel my hug. Merry Christmas!

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  27. Rudri Bhatt Patel @ Being RudriDecember 24, 2011 at 4:48 PM

    Imagery is vivid and inspiring. Happy Holidays to you and yours Ayala.

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  28. ayalaJanuary 1, 2012 at 8:09 PM

    Thank you, Rudri. I wish you the same. :) Best wishes!

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