Sun Kissed Days

Sun Kissed Days

Tuesday, June 14, 2011

On The Way To Paris

A modern day knight
in shinning armor,
for his country.
His official passport wallpapered
with truths untold.
At what cost,
his family?
his soul ?
Saving lives but not
his own.
He dreams out loud of fishing
with his boys,
a snapshot of their life.
His voice trails,
"I lost my family" he said,
defeated,
silent.
Focus the eye on the prize,
but the prize is gone.
It belongs to a man sleeping
with the wife he loved,
raising his children.
Time awaits for no one,
the price was paid,
as the smell of war lingers,
in his senses.
The smell of burnt bodies seared into his memory.
The pain of young fallen soldiers,
he masks the pain,
but I hear it loud and clear,
sharp as a knife ,
the words scar my soul.

42 comments:

  1. oh this is sad and heavy...always busy and yet lose you family...or off serving your country and the same..either way...ugh...nice write

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  2. sad heart-touching ...a wonderful write.

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  3. there are far too many of those modern day knights...and they give their life to win...and yet lose everything..

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  4. How true it is...on so very many levels, that we can spend our lives, or part of them, fighting for the worng things. This is quite stirring. As I do with many of your poems, I'll be back for a re-read.

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  5. gave it all to win and lost in the end.. great piece!

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  6. Very nice write
    About such a plight
    As such a knight has many things to say
    If only he could still speak today
    Yet through the so called glory he is now past
    As war should no longer last

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  7. This hangs heavy with the reader. You even evoke smell. Well constructed piece.

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  8. heavy and beautiful Ayala...loved this line "His official passport wallpapered with truths untold."...such a perfect entry into the story that will unfold.

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  9. This one wrenches at the soul, as pieces of war and its victims always should...gave it all and lost it all, and the story, this story of life, repeats again and again in so many people...

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  10. A hard , but well written piece to read. Love that dog! Vb

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  11. what a heartbreaking story of sacrifice and loss. You told the story well.

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  12. Beautiful, heartbreaking piece!

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  13. So heartbreaking and so true, ayala - sacrificing for the greater good and giving up everything personally important.

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  14. beautiful Ayala, truth both from the past and present, great one shot!

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  15. Even if he won the war he lost what mattered more... nice.

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  16. A knight who dreams of fishing with his boys -- that's a heartrending image. Nice one.

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  17. To all the knights who have lost in the end... so much depth, so many levels. Well penned.

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  18. You told a whole story in this piece. So sad; story well told.

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  19. Ayala, its powerful and thought provoking! I love it!

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  20. Great narrative. Perceptive and skilfully constructed, with a real sense of history. Great job! James.

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  21. captivating and sad, well said.

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  22. Gripping and sorrowful...well spun write.

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  23. fishing with his boys or searing smell of death... you made me feel his pain and sorrow.

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  24. a touching story, painted vividly. thanks for sharing!

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  25. Why does this have to happen? What happened to "until death do us part"? It's hard... but so is any commitment.

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  27. A wonderful yet sad write. War is fought on many fronts.

    Anna :o]

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  28. Military folk are required to make so many sacrifices...more than I can ever know. Never thouht about this one until you kicked me in the teeth with it. Thanks.

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  29. Hard subject well tackled.

    Thanks for sharing :)

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  30. War is hell...and to think otherwise is lying to oneself....nice write on the subject...bkm

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  31. This is a sad reality for too many who sacrifice everything. Great one shot.

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  32. Now you've made me cry!!! This is so touching, such a sad reality. Beautifully written, Ayala.

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  33. Heart-wrenching and lovely poem. I especially loved your ending.

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  34. This is the stuff I think of, whenever some new war comes along and everybody seems to be all for it, convinced it will be easy and short. This is the cost. Times a few million.

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  35. oh my!! he certainly did NOT deserve what he got.. :(
    And that's what I mean when I say "war does NO GOOD to NOBODY!"

    Such a moving read, Ayala... beautiful!

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  36. strong, emotive imagery here... this one kicked me in the guts -

    The smell of burnt bodies seared into his memory.

    good job

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  37. A perspective still associated with our warriors today. Evoking of powerful emotions through the read ~ Great write! Rose

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